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Post by Sp❣rit on Jan 1, 2012 20:42:19 GMT -5
2012, New Year’s Day. The sky was positively gloomy as it practically rained depression on the heads that passed on by nonchalantly, not making a big deal of the occasion as they walked around with sour expressions from their hang overs. Most didn’t bother leaving the house; it was cold, bitter, and it looked as if you were smoking just by breathing. This winter had been warmer than the previous years, but it was bound to get colder later as the clouds ominously approached with a deep grey coloration. It was definitely going to snow like crazy out of the blue, according to multiple TV shows. Susumu managed to catch a glimpse of it in a near sleepy state as he stopped by the Kwikie Mart to pick up a few snacks for his Pokemon. He had 8 mouths to feed on his team and it was rather exhausting, especially when they constantly picked fights with each other.
He doubted he’d bother with adding more Pokemon to his team after he earned more badges, finding it troublesome enough with the ones he had. Then again, most trainers typically had 6 Pokemon. He literally had no idea how people managed to reduce so many good Pokemon to that amount, sending a glance at his Pokeball belt as he sauntered towards the ruins with the idea to get shards in mind. It was something productive to do, and what the hell, he was going to do it. As he stopped in front of the entrance to the mines, that giant hiker guy stopped him yet again and harassed him for things. His ID, name, how often he mined down here, and what Pokemon he planned on using.
”Gah…” He grumbled as he shifted through his Pokeballs, feeling his nose freeze from the temperature as he decided on Resixionne. The Torkoal was soon out with a pair of ‘Deal with it’ glasses, simply staring emotionlessly at the hiker as she was admired for a few moments. ”Ok, adventurers! Go forth!” The loud hiker laughed as he smacked Susumu hard on the back, presumably for encouragement when he only felt nothing but soreness and pain. The blonde just looked uncomfortable, but glad to be away from that guy as he wandered down the tunnels with his warm, portable oven by his side. The Torkoal’s very body let off enough steam to keep him warm, sighing in content as he started to unzip his dark black winter jacket. Kind of classy, which he liked, but it wasn’t the most impressive thing ever. He had the old thing for about 2 years, and he was debating buying a new one to treat himself to something good.
”I’m so glad you’re hot.” He commented in relief, his voice echoing blissfully down the tunnels, reaching several ears as trainers gave him an odd stare. Shit. He blushed uncomfortably and pretended to look as if he didn’t just say anything odd and weird. Damn, he had to think more about what he said. <Shut up baby, I know it.> The Torkoal snorted, walking slowly behind him until the pair picked out a spot that looked good to mine in. Less people were down here, it generally seemed quieter, and he felt pretty good down here. Taking out the hammer, he started banging into the walls as Resixionne plopped herself down on the ground and watched with boredom. Like hell she was digging.
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Tutor thread! It'll work out Berry, don't worry! Basically I'll make comments about your posts and give you things to work on. For starters, maybe mention in your next post your characters concerns about mining. If its her first time, or if she has any experiences with it. Go for it!
Resixionne Level 25|Female Explosion|Rapid Spin|Smokescreen Fire Spin|Curse|Smog|Ember Ball-buster - Wise - Withdrawn - Enjoys drinking - Sarcastic Shut up baby, I know it!Mining Post 1/10
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Post by Cubbie ♥ on Jan 1, 2012 21:59:22 GMT -5
Bubu! Plants don't belong underground________________________________________________ "A mine? for what reasons would i go there?" Well, those were her exact words which she said in the past about the Ruins ... until she heard that people were able to make a fortune from digging there. That was exactly what she needed. She barely had enough money as it was to feed both of her two Pokémon and herself. With the amount of cash that she could acquire, it would possibly help her feed her Pokémon for months, not mentioned could be used to help her get that little oomph she needed to create some fame. So with her upon Urah, she dashed along all the way to the location at mach speed, forgetting to get anything prepare such as shovels and etc.She arrived at her location, in rather a bit of a mess. Travelling on Pokémon was always a bit... messy whether you liked it or not. Haru obviously didn't mind, given the neglect she has towards fashion, cept on winter days that is, she always seems to be wearing fashionable clothes at these times, despite this is one of her most hated weather due to the havoc of the wintry winds. She slowly got off her pokemon, using both of her hands to rub the exterior of the two heads. Doduo purred, before returning toward their usual bickers with one and another. This was due to having two head, a bit similar to Haru, but they could bother control the body. They hated the fact that they shared control so they would start fights whenever and wherever they could. Haru loves me more. | No! didn't you see the way she was rubbing my feathers, obviously she cares about me more. | More like ruffling your feathers, you look like you came out of a hurricane. Haru chuckled at their constant fights, it couldn't help her remind herself of someone. Well, once she made sure everything was okay with the two twin pokemon, she returned the Doduo to it's respective pokeball. She took a glance around at the ruins, to see what she was getting herself into. She didn't particularly feel anything special about it, nor she didn't see any plant life around here which could give her secrets to any secret route or such. There was only one entrance, protected by a chunky looking man with some protective headgear. Perhaps he would be kind enough to give some insightful info to the whereabouts of this mine and how does it work. She stepped up towards the man who was dormant on the ground, cleaning a dirty shovel with some cloth. " Um, Hello? Would this be the entrance to the mine?" The miner shook his head, without giving Haru a glance. He seemed to wrapped up with the shovel, must be one of those 'man things'. However he did speak, "Aye lass, Just head down through there and look like ye are adventuring for some treasure. Just don't get your hope up." His words somehow demotivated her, yet she hurried inside. Nothing was stopping her will power from at least attempting to find something worth money. As she got deeper inside, the darker the place became. It's wasn't like they would put lighting down here, it would cost too much money for the budget probably. Luckily enough, Haru did have a match with her. She took a piece of wood from the floor, checking that it was dead first. She was part plant so she didn't like the idea of setting fire to those of her kind, but since it was dead, it wouldn't do much harm. Skidding the match light toward herseld, she set a gentle fire to the wooden torch, well... it is a torch now. Staring around at the ground all walls, she began to notice human foot steps as well as pokemons. This obviously meant that trainer were in here with their pokemon, probably using them to help them dig or perhaps for other purposes. Neither less, she thought it was a great idea. No one could ind a treasure on their own, and Pokémon were practically like slaves, even though Haru didn't think of them like this, she did know that finding treasure would be of benefit to them as well. Throwing her pokeball to the ground, she released a sparkle of crimson light which materialized into a Caterpie. " Alright Mewtwo, come along with me. If you see anything which looks rare, string shot it and place it in my bag please." Mewtwo looked at it's trainer, rather curiously staring towards her neck. It seemed like mewtwo seemed to get extremely... lustful over it. With a nod, it begun to follow after Haru, taking in anything which looked rare in her bag. But the reason for listening into her actions wasn't for his trainer... no no, he wanted to find a way to subdue this so called master, for her to lower her neck, just so he could take a little nibble at her neck. Unaware of her Pokémon intentions, she begun to wander in further, until she took sight of a mysterious red glow (Yes this is your pokemon) she piqued her curiosity. With that in mind, she marched towards this red glow, without a care in her mind what is to come... ________________________________________________ "Mewtwo" the Caterpie Level 5 Male Shield Dust Tackle|String Shot //Digging// 1/10
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Post by freeziepop on Jan 1, 2012 22:47:35 GMT -5
Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!). I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie. I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them.
"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was... Draco Malfoy!
"What's up Draco?" I asked.
"Nothing." he said shyly.
But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away.
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Post by Sp❣rit on Jan 1, 2012 23:15:22 GMT -5
Susumu felt his hands tingle at the feel of the metal tool slamming into the hard rock, a bit surprised because this particular one felt a bit off. Actually, a lot off. As if it wasn't as sturdy as the usual ones. It was a crappy rental after all, but it was enough to stop the sounds of a tool pounding the wall. The echoes of the other miners remained in the tunnel, leading further away from him as he held the hammer in his hand to check it out.
"Ugh, these hammers suck." The 18 year old frowned as he tried to twist on the metallic part tighter on the rod. It just seemed loose for some reason, as if it was going to fall off. At least there was still a pick-axe and a shovel, but these rocks were so damn hard, it was just easier smashing things with the hammer. The Torkoal didn't even flinch as she sighed and let off more steam, filling the area with a humid scent to maintain the warm temperature.
It wasn't a surprise that the girl was wandering closer to them like this; but she didn't stand out at all. Resixionne was lazily watching her trainer and was attempting to doze off, though the ground wasn't exactly the comfiest thing ever. She preferred things that were softer than this super flat ground.
Susumu definitely looked frustrated as he gave the hammer another test swing, a little lighter than before since he thought it was a bit fragile. Right then, the top popped off after smashing into the wall. "Shit." He hissed in annoyance as he kicked the metal piece away, wincing because it ended up hurting his foot. Nothing bad, but ow. Sore. Ow.
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" The twin bird purred, before returning toward their usual bickers with one and another with the words Haru loves me more. | No! didn't you see the way she was rubbing my feathers, obviously she cares about me more. | More like ruffling your feathers, you look like you came out of a hurricane. "
Even though if we look in your PC (or your Pokémon team), it would really help to give us more of a clue than the 'twin bird'. I was thinking it was like, her twin bud or something. You should make paragraphs a little simpler to understand so its more pleasant to read. Just less mystery for people new to your character.
*Caterpie :(
Resixionne Level 25|Female Explosion|Rapid Spin|Smokescreen Fire Spin|Curse|Smog|Ember Ball-buster - Wise - Withdrawn - Enjoys drinking - Sarcastic Shut up baby, I know it!Mining Post 2/10
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Post by Cubbie ♥ on Jan 2, 2012 9:00:56 GMT -5
Suesuesue ehehehe________________________________________________ Haru approached the red glow, to it originating from a pokemon. Not much to see there apart from a blonde trainer. She couldn't really mind him any attention, as she didn't have any single plan to spend any time with boys, not that she didn't think he looked cute or anything. But she rather spend time looking for rare stones and stuff instead of having a chat. Who would have a chat with someone who would probably treat her different due to a feature on her head anyway? Strolling on past him, she attempted to find a good area to settle down and dig, yet she did notice that she had no mining equipment. Hmm, would it be good to go back to that man that she passed and ask for some equipment, no it wouldn't. Not after how she rudely passed him, it would make her look rather selfish. So she had to settle for her hands, luckily enough for her she had Mewtwo to help out digging. She looked at her pokemon, somewhat noticing it was staring at her neck in a strange way. Shrugging it off, she used the scarf which was around her neck as a hand wrap, to protect her hands fro the bacteria which could lurk upon the ground. As for the Caterpie, Mewtwo was helping out a bit, not much caring about whether or not what he was finding was rare or not. Actually, pretty much all of her bag was filled with dirt and stones. He was actually awaiting for the perfect time, for when Haru lowers her head, that would be the time that Mewtwo would strike, attempting to bite into her veins. The plan was pretty much perfect and if it did work, he would be able to easily escape Haru's clutches, having no trainer. No one to keep him in shackles. ________________________________________________ "Mewtwo" the Catapie Level 5 Male Shield Dust Tackle|String Shot //Digging// 2/10 Words; 310 OOC; But within the next paragraph, i said 'she returned the Dodou to it's respective Pokeball.' Wouldn't that really give like a big hint to what they are?
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Post by Sp❣rit on Jan 2, 2012 12:08:10 GMT -5
Susumu’s foot really did hurt, still wincing as he shook it awkwardly as if he was doing the hokey pokey, turning himself around. That’s what it’s all about. ’Damn. Damn. Damn. Oh shit, there’s a girl there.’ He froze and pretended as if he wasn’t in pain at the sight of the pink haired girl, only catching a glimpse of her face as he quickly spun around and pretended to look busy examining the wall. She didn’t look as if she was busy mining or anything, so he wondered if she was walking around looking for a spot. Come to think of it, she didn’t appear to have a partner either. He lacked a partner like how the man that lost his entire left side from a train accident lacked his left arm, but it was ok because he was all right now.
He shyly turned his head around again to glance back at her, catching sight of what looked like a mistletoe hiding away in her hair. It looked rather festive from what he could tell, though she was a bit late holiday wise. Maybe she was desperate for kisses? He frowned at the thought, shivering a little as he looked back at the wall with a hopeless stare. His hammer broke, he had two tools left, and he wasn’t even so sure how reliable they were. ”Hey useless, think you can dig?” Susumu called out teasingly to the Torkoal that was behind him, not glancing at her as he could hear the turtle shuffling around behind him. <You don’t need my balls, screw something else.> The Torkoal muttered in a sleepy tone, actually managing to get herself tired as she snorted out an intense wave of smoke around her.
It was hot and warm; smelling like an open fire, like when camping or roasting chestnuts. While it was meant to scare her trainer and tell him off, the smoke did go all the way off towards Haru as the Torkoal made an uncaring yawn. It wasn’t as if Resixionne actually hated anybody, but she literally did not give two shits about what was going on around her. She was only down here to keep the place warm, so as long as she was doing her purpose, don’t add onto the to-do list.
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Well its especially important in mod posts to make sure things are easy to understand. It shouldn't have to be a mystery for so long, even though you eventually did say the species name. Also I just realized you spelled that wrong too. XD 'Doduo' is correct, like, duo heads. Not the extinct bird.
By pointing out certain details earlier, you'll keep the attention of the reader instead of watching them lose interest and misinterpret your post.
"Approached closer to the red glow"
The sentence is a little awkward for the past tense to be there by itself. Maybe "She approached closer to the red glow". You also shouldn't have to use "an" before a word that doesn't start with a vowel. Unless you wanna be an hero, that is. :C
"Not after how she rudely passed him, it would be rather rude"
Duh. rudely passing someone would be rude. Kind of a bland sentence that wouldn't have to be there, unless you changed the word 'rude'.
ANYWAYS Enough of the critique. Positive stuff!
I like that you did read my post to base your characters thoughts off of that. She realized she came down here unprepared to dig on her own.
I wish you would've noticed the clear signs that my trainer was in pain, since it's rather hard to ignore pained swearing without naturally asking 'is everything ok?', especially since your character seems like the type to do something like that. Or at least show concern.
You do a good job of keeping your Pokemon interesting, which is important in mod posts.
For your next post, try to work on showing your characters thoughts about others. Whether its my character, his Pokemon, or your Caterpie. People judge, it's only natural. Your post didn't give me much to work with at all, and an RP should build off of each RPer. So we'll try to give each other something to actually respond to!
Resixionne Level 25|Female Explosion|Rapid Spin|Smokescreen Fire Spin|Curse|Smog|Ember Ball-buster - Wise - Withdrawn - Enjoys drinking - Sarcastic You don't need my balls!Mining Post 3/10
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Post by Cubbie ♥ on Jan 2, 2012 13:47:43 GMT -5
Fire? FIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIRRRRRRRRRRREEEEEE!________________________________________________ It was pretty tough on Haru, attempting to excavate with her hands, luckily for her, the scarf around her hands lessened the strain which came from her actions. It was a pretty good idea for her, a quite twist from her usual clumsy behavior. Perhaps light was shining upon her for today, well she thought that as her view started to become clouded with some sort of gas. She was clueless, wondering what the identity of substance that filled up the area. It only took a breath of it for her questions to be answered by a small cough. " Smoke?" She thought. This made her ponder how this came here. But a bit skeptical about her own fears, the first thing she suspected was that there was a fire starting nearby. Oh- this would be a serious problem for Haru if there were a fire, not only would it prevent one of her routes, but she also has somewhat of a fear of flames. Quick on her toes, she followed the trace of the smoke, attempting to see where the fire was coming from and if it was blocking her exit from the ruins. = Mewtwo stared around for a moment to notice that his trainer wasn't around. " That good for nothing-" Those were the word which Caterpie wanted to say with its own mouth. How could it's trainer abandon it just like that, if this wasn't a attempt to get rid of Mewtwo, this must of be a been mistake made by Haru once again. This Caterpie didn't know this however and began to make this personal. With a short glance around at the smoky scenery, Caterpie traveled towards the area of the exit, somewhat thankful to Haru. After all, this is the perfect chance for him to escape! = Haru, who was completely oblivious of the abandoning of her Caterpie, headed in the area which the smoke appeared to come from. Oddly enough, she saw the blonde trainer once again, along with that... turtle like Pokémon. She completely was puzzled, wondering about the whereabouts of the fire, yet she was rather more curious about the man and why he was still within the vicinity when he should be escaping. With a cough to draw attention, she said the words " Why are you here? Didn't you see the smoke? There's a fire." ________________________________________________ "Mewtwo" the Caterpie Level 5 Male Shield Dust Tackle|String Shot //Digging// 3/10 Words; 376 OOC; Ah i see. Let me comment on all of the feedback you've gave me.
Yeah, sometime i forgot that i need to be simple at the same time that i'm a bit too simple. It's a bit of too yin or too yang with me ^^;
Doduo? Dang i kept spelling it as Dodou :/
For the next one, i sometimes type a bit fast, making mistakes like that. I have a bit of a speed with reading my posts, skipping over words making them end like that. I'll try and solve that.
Haha, sorry 'bout the ruse mistake. Likewise with the words i just typed before.
Anyhow, thanks for the helpful criticism, double checking my post right now and then it'd be posted. You'd know it be posted cause you'll be reading it -3-
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Post by Sp❣rit on Jan 2, 2012 21:39:34 GMT -5
The Caterpie was bound to be ignored, but they weren't the only ones digging down here. There was a smelly homeless guy smoking some chocolate chip cookies as he breathed in the fumes, shaking his lighter as he let out a breathy sigh into the cold open air. He was literally blocking the path of the Caterpie, grinning wildly at the sight of the bug; he extended a hand out towards the worm. "Ah, is that my free virgin I see?" He asked as he saw the beautiful woman approach him, unaware at the fact that it was actually a puny Caterpie.
Back to the two trainers and a Torkoal, the smoke continued to emerge from her back as the area heated up with an appreciated warmth. It almost felt like a sauna, but the air was dry and he didn't feel like sweating up a storm. It was just warm and peaceful, which Susumu appreciated. Giving up on the hammer as he picked up his shovel, he started to dig into the wall when he heard a voice come from behind him. He made a face as the shovel stuck in the wall, not needing him to hold onto it as he let go and saw Haru once more. Whoa, talk about a familiar face. He didn't think that the voice belonged to her; and now that he was really looking at her, he had a better look at her head.
What a strange hair accessory. It looked realistic, as if it was really in her head. "Can't you see where the smoke is coming from? It's just a Torkoal." He pointed out, since the smoke wasn't blocking their eyesight like a Smokescreen. He pointed over at the Torkoal that was dozing off, looking more and more comfortable as she went into a sleepy daze. "It's better being warm than cold." He shrugged at her, hoping she didn't mind too terribly. He figured it would be a good thing instead of a bad one in this weather.
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The homeless smoker is an NPC, you can control him. I just wanted to give your bug something to do. <3
I can tell you're rushing your posts a little; I'm not sure if you're a native English speaker, but sometimes saying what you write outloud helps to see if its correct or not. That being said, nothing wrong with narrating things with an accent, that personified kind of writing. <3
also yeah the species is spelled "Caterpie" not "Catapie".
also yay, interaction now. <3 I'm glad.
Resixionne Level 25|Female Explosion|Rapid Spin|Smokescreen Fire Spin|Curse|Smog|Ember Ball-buster - Wise - Withdrawn - Enjoys drinking - Sarcastic You don't need my balls!Mining Post 4/10
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Post by Cubbie ♥ on Jan 4, 2012 11:33:00 GMT -5
Ew... A fire pokemon________________________________________________ = " What fool dares to stand in my presence?" Caterpie was rather in a good mood, till he saw what seemed to be a silhouette of a human. He despised the sudden turn of luck he had, as he did have a moment to escape but that was soon ruined by the figure which appeared. He wondered if he perhaps had enough time to hide and conceal his presence, but it was a bit too late as she was greeted by the voice of this stranger who seemed to be an scruffy old man, reeking of a vulgar odor. ' Free Virgin? What is this fool muttering about? Does he think of me as a human?' It's not as Caterpie had more weirdoes to deal with, like this weird out mutated trainer he has but now a person who thinks he a girl? What the hell is the region becoming? He had to think of a way to deal with this man but had no ways to do this without an offensive tactic. As the man approached him, dangling a lighter in his hands rather shakily, Caterpie drew it's head back, creating a mixture of fluid within its mouth, awaiting for the perfect time to strike and create a quick escape. A simple plan to use string shot on the man's face to blind him, although, the man eyesight seemed rather blind already. = A fire Pokémon? That was the next dangerous thing next to a fire, well... it was to Haru at the very least. Haru moved over to the side of the blonde man which was face away to the creature, pretty much trying to stay a distance away from the fire Pokémon. She pretty much thought of all fire Pokémon like demon which was incarnated from hell to turn her alive. Trying to occupy her fears, she turn over to the man, feeling a bit embarrassed of the situation which just occurred. She let out a light " Oh” to try and let out a bit of her feelings of relief. She terribly doubted that being near a fire Pokémon was better than being cold. After all, fires can burn down forests, but the cold just give the forest a makeover. That's how she thought of it. Her mind sketched over subjects that she could talk about, as she didn't particularly like the one that they were on currently. Locating her finger toward her bottom lip, she let out an "Hmm" before trying to stir up a new conversation. " By the way, I’m Haru. Since we are here it would be a bit nice to know each other, wouldn't it?" This was defiantly a good start she thought, after all, this may get her mind of the sleeping devil which lurked in the distance. But for some reason... she felt as if she was forgetting about something... something important. ________________________________________________ Mewtwo the Caterpie Level Five || Male Shield Dust Tackle || String Shot //Digging// 4/10 Words; 480 OOC; Can't think of any responses x:
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Post by Sp❣rit on Jan 4, 2012 12:50:24 GMT -5
His virgin was talking to him in a babble of the ancient Rice Crispy language, which was said to have a calendar that predicted the end of the world this very year. The homeless man could only cough on what he was smoking as he breathed in the scent of the burning cookies with glee. Staggering forward in an attempt to caress the Caterpie's cheek, he giggled childishly as he leaned in real close to talk to the worm. "Hey baby, I can make your heart race." He flopped out the line as he struggled to talk normally, feeling as if his mouth and tongue was numb and hard to control.
He could see the Caterpie doing something weird with its mouth as it kept gathering something up in its mouth. Did it want a kiss? Was it chewing bubble gum? "Can I have some bubble gum? Or should I steal it from you?" He said the latter suggestion with a sneaky smile, deciding to be the dominant one here as he attempted to kiss the Caterpie to 'steal its bubblegum'. Abort! Abort! Mayday! Houston, we have a problem! Going down!
Flinching when Susumu saw that the girl was suddenly at his side, he glanced at her with a concerned look. She was moving in a way that seemed to show that she wanted nothing to do with his Torkoal, even if the Pokemon made the area much easier to be in. It was a little uncomfortable, especially since she seemed lost and confused down here. Pretty much everyone he met in the Shasta Ruins knew that they had a purpose to dig their little hearts out for shards. This one just looked like she was exploring for the fun of it all.
He decided to try and kill the awkwardness by fiddling with the shovel in the wall, pretending to look busier than he really was as Resixionne dozed off completely now. She'd probably wake up if provoked, but she was serving her purpose as a portable heater.
Introduction time all of a sudden, which Susumu didn't mind, but it seemed very out of place to him. "Haru, huh? That doesn't sound like an English name." He commented, wondering if she had Asian parents or something. She didn't look Asian, so the name stuck out to him as odd. "A lot of people call me Shamu, I guess because my name is hard to say." It kind of was a bit of a tongue twister to some people, especially the ones that made fun of him back in the day. "Did you forget your digging tools? You can use one of mine, so we can talk and dig together." He still had his pick axe left, in case she wanted to work on the wall with him. Besides, it must've been awkward to stand there when he looked busy doing something.
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<3 thanks for listening and making the right changes. So far it looks good, just a few rushed mistakes that I think you would catch if you read it over.
Also I hope your posts aren't this long if you plan on being a mod lmao.
Resixionne Level 25|Female Explosion|Rapid Spin|Smokescreen Fire Spin|Curse|Smog|Ember Ball-buster - Wise - Withdrawn - Enjoys drinking - Sarcastic Zzzz...Mining Post 5/10
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Post by Cubbie ♥ on Jan 5, 2012 13:40:28 GMT -5
Ew...________________________________________________ Now! The Caterpie shot out string into the man's face, instantly blinding him. Using that as a deterrence, Caterpie dashed off as far as its tiny legs could take it. It was a close one though as it's body was nearly in contact with the lips of a human. He must be a freak, a furry loving freak. Being quite the distance away from him to a point where the man couldn't catch up, Caterpie took a sigh of relief. He was finally away from that crazy man. This whole experience made him think that it would have been a lot safer within the comforts of its pokéball. But, he couldn't give up his escape plan. Not now... he was only moments away from soon escaping... little did he know that up ahead was where Haru was located. = ' Shamu...? Seems a bit of a simple yet odd name.' She was pretty much listening to Shamu while at the same time digging at the ground with her hands. It felt rather simple doing these actions like this as there she easily was able to pick up things which looked of interest rather than having a bag full of dirt. After a girl got to work hard to get what she wants in this life. Due to these thoughts, she kindly declined the offer for a shovel. " It's much easier using my hands. After all, we get more profit when the work is harder~" She chuckled, trying to lighten up the mood. Yet at the corner of her eye, she was still keeping a lookout at the fire Pokémon, feeling particularly unsafe from it. She didn't know what that devil was thinking, although she thought it was most likely faking its sleep, awaiting for the perfect time to strike. She took a rather analysing look at Shamu, checking for any suspicious features. You never know when you could be confronted by trouble even from the nicest looking of people. " So, I guess you from this area then? You seem to know what you doing." She said with a rather curious voice, as their conversation continued... ________________________________________________ Mewtwo the Caterpie Level Five || Male Shield Dust Tackle || String Shot //Digging// 5/10 Words; 354 OOC; My post are only long in interaction threads~
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Post by Sp❣rit on Jan 5, 2012 14:14:29 GMT -5
The Caterpie was hard to notice, especially in the dark tunnels. As it approached the group, Susumu obliviously continued his conversation with Haru while attempting to scoop out more dirt from the wall. There was a mini landslide of earth as it tumbled out from his last strike, looking annoyed as he moved out of the way and shook the dirt off of his shoes. This was definitely dirty work, but at least he was doing it in a way where he wouldn't get hurt.
Glancing over at Haru, he could only stare in surprise as she dug with her hands. She refused his offer too, wondering how it must've felt to have all of that dirt dig into her nails. Weren't they going to break or something? Not only that, but there were actual rocks in here too. How in the world was it easier to dig with hands? He could only watch with a confused expression as the odd girl made that statement and continued...doing her thing. Pink hair swag, whatever that was. A bit too strange for him, he decided not to question it too much as he kept his thoughts to himself. He found himself wishing one of his friends was down here though, so he could at the very least go 'WTF' with someone else.
Resixionne let out a sigh as she slipped her head on her arms, as if they were a soft and warm pillow. Sleeping with glasses on looked as if it would've been uncomfortable, but she was used to wearing them. She was very used to wearing them, especially since she felt so exposed when they were taken off. How was she supposed to look good if she couldn't tell people to deal with it with a single glance in their direction? It was hard, ok? She continued to sleep for a while, steam rising from her back as she continued to provide warmth for the two trainers.
"Oh? I guess you can say that." Just because he knew how to dig didn't mean that he lived around here. He considered TD his home though, which was out of the region. Much like how Shasta Ruins was out of the region, but nearby. It was the same with the TD Base, which was why he decided it was a good idea to stop by here. Why not, it was a good way to be productive. "I've only been in Cheyenne for almost 3 years. Started my journey in '09." He grinned at her, a bit proud of how far he came since then. He was going to try to stick to this training thing, since there were times when he just gave up completely.
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Some issues with the past tense, which I've noticed in several of your posts.
she kindly declines the offer *declined
The Caterpie shot out string into the man's face **** instantly blinding him
It would be good to have a pause here, like a comma.
'Shamu?...
Be careful not to abuse ellipses, and when you do use them you'd want them before the punctuation. So it would be "Shamu...?" instead.
Resixionne Level 25|Female Explosion|Rapid Spin|Smokescreen Fire Spin|Curse|Smog|Ember Ball-buster - Wise - Withdrawn - Enjoys drinking - Sarcastic Zzzz...Mining Post 6/10
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Post by Cubbie ♥ on Jan 6, 2012 11:56:12 GMT -5
Nya~ Says the dog________________________________________________ The darkness of the cave showed no bounds to the Caterpie which was adventuring through the path, hoping that the exit would be near. Normally, if he were a human, he'd would of reached his destination now, but unfortunately for Mewtwo, his stubby little toes were barely a match compared to the long legs of humans. That's the ultimate reason why he despised people, it seems like wherever he would go, there would be someone who is more capable than him. But from a corner of this little Caterpie's sight, there was a light formed there with a rather warm glow. Was this it? Did he really find the exit? Using all of his energy, he ran towards the light. However, his expectations were fell short when he bumped right into the legs of someone familiar. Confusion occurred within his mind as he felt a sadness overflow him. The cause of this sadness was the face of Haru who peered down at him in curiosity, just remembering about him after all of this time. " Mewtwo? You’re pretty slow on your feet." This sentence made his blood boil as tears of anger filled his eyes. Instantly, he began to spurt out swear words. Pretty much a lot of them, he was unable to control how furious he was. Did she know what he went through? He wanted to escape! Not go right back to his prison cell. Haru mind's was completely blank, she couldn't understand what he was going through nor did she know what he was saying. But the Caterpie crying was something she couldn't tolerate. She needed a way to calm him down and fast. Her hands reached down and forcefully grabbed Mewtwo who was still in a fit. She got a finger and begn to play around with her Caterpie, attempting to get it to giggle and jiggle around more. <" What are you doing - Hahaha- Stop it Woma -Hahaha-"> Caterpie tried to resist, but was completely unable to. With the state he was in, it was impossible for him to fight back. Whilst tingling the pokemon, Haru turned over to Shamu. " Ah, this is Mewtwo! He's my first Pokémon." She said while sounding a bit joyful as she spoke words. ________________________________________________ Mewtwo the Caterpie Level Five || Male Shield Dust Tackle || String Shot //Digging// 6/10 Words; too lazy to check OOC; I do have trouble with that ~ The post was cut shorter than i could of made it cause this is a perfect chance for you to react to what just occurred~
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Post by Sp❣rit on Jan 6, 2012 15:35:57 GMT -5
Susumu blinked when he didn't hear a response from Haru at all, as if she was distracted by something. He winced as if his words didn't matter, and chose not to talk as much if she was just going to ignore him like that. So much for opening up to strangers, right? He was curious though, and as he turned around to see the commotion he noticed a pretty moody looking Caterpie down there. Ha, it was funny. He had one too, though it was a shadow one. For some reason, he could tell that the two would not get along at all.
"You called it Mewtwo?"He asked with a hint of interest in his question, hoping she'd elaborate on the name. Her Pokemon looked like an emotional mess, which caused a spike of a reaction in the sleeping Torkoal. With a hiss and another spew of smoke, the giant orange turtle started to rise as she looked around in a daze. Her glasses nearly slid off of her nose as she lifted up her head to push them back up, a nervous habit of hers. The glasses had to be on at all times, or she would flip out.
<Annoying, loud...obnoxious children. Why aren't you digging?> She growled, irritated that they were just...tickling right in front of her. She was horrified at the sound of laughter, having expected this to be a very easy experience for her. All she planned to do was sleep, but nooo. They had to be obnoxious and laugh loudly and irrationally.
"Ah, you were just letting him run around the tunnels?" Susumu asked when she introduced the Caterpie, before glaring at his Torkoal. What was she doing, trying to start a fight? "Resixionne, easy." Long, fancy name. He kept trying to shorten it to 'Resix', but every time he did she looked ready to kill him. The 'ionne' had to stay.
As Susumu dug the shovel back into the earth, shards weren't the only things to come out of the earth. Somehow, a shiny orb that must've been lodged in there for about 6 years popped right out. It rolled gayly towards the Torkoal, tapping her on the foot as suddenly her coloration started to melt and blend into a new one. <I feel tingly...> She commented with a shudder, feeling sick as she didn't bother to notice the transformation just yet. All she knew was that a ball touched her. Odd.
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I think your posts are good, I'm not sure what else to say other than the really picky details of your posts. I would guess that it would bother a lot of the grammar nazis. XD I'll try and pick them out so you can maybe be more aware of where you're making these mistakes.
Normally, if her were a human *he
But from a corner of this little Caterpie's sight... there
The ellipses aren't needed. :C a comma would work out a lot better.
Haru mind *Haru's mind
she couldn't understand what he was going through neither did she know what he was saying.
Worded very very awkwardly. Instead of neither, maybe 'nor' would sound better.
attempting to get it too giggle *to Usually use this kind of 'to' before a verb, like giggle.
A critique about your post would be that it feels like you hardly reacted to mine at all. As if you typed your own without caring about what mine said. An RP, especially in an interaction thread, should have some kind of connection between roleplayers. I didn't feel it that time.
Resixionne Level 25|Female Explosion|Rapid Spin|Smokescreen Fire Spin|Curse|Smog|Ember Ball-buster - Wise - Withdrawn - Enjoys drinking - Sarcastic Became Shiny, oh snap.Mining Post 7/10
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Post by Cubbie ♥ on Jan 8, 2012 7:16:34 GMT -5
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why don't you come and visit me | [atrb=style, background-color: #565866;width: 460px; padding: 5px; text-shadow: 1px 1px 1px #91a27d; text-align:center;] Whistle While you Work "Quote of the post" | [atrb=style, background-color: F0F0F0; width: 460px; border-right: 6px solid #565866; border-left: 6px solid #565866; padding: 5px;color:#565866] Haru was still occupied with tickling her Pokémon till it didn't remember the reason why it was angry or sad. As this happened, Caterpie was completely bewitched by the motion of Haru's fingers, being too weak to fight against his trainer. Caterpie didn't like this one bit, being forced to be amused just so his trainer could think that he was happy. Well, he was a bit happy that his trainer did try at least- but this was a bit of a bad idea.
"Yep! This is a Mewtwo. Got it from the lab." she said rather cheerfully, not really noticing the movement of the fire Pokémon at first. She was distracted from it, which was good due to her fear of it. She was focused on Shamu for a moment as she answered the questions that were casually asked to her. She seemed to rather enjoy his company, as it was a bit lonely within the ruins and all.
"Oh? It was right behind me. I doubt that's letting my Pokémon 'run around." She reached her hand down and began to tickle at his toes while holding one up. "See, he can't even run." She was attempting too tease her Pokémon a bit, seeing how he'd react. But Mewtwo was too busy being tickled to even notice or react.
It wasn't till after Shamu said some words to his Pokémon till she realized that it was in movement. She jumped back, pulling her Pokémon close to her chest as she cautiously stared at the fire type. 'It moved! See! I was right, that thing is plotting something against me.' Her thoughts were backed up by the pokemon's growling which didn't look that the Pokémon was in any mood to seem friendly.
After seeing him telling off his pokemon, she saw Shamu dig out a object. It looked like a colorful orb, or something similar. But it was a big surprise as she witness the effects it made when it got in contact with the grumpy Pokémon. A bright shine formed around the Pokémon as the colors of its form changed into... something else. She her hand out and pointing towards the pokemon, she said rather shockingly "Did it just evolve?!" Haru never witnessed evolution before but heard of it. She did expect something much more bigger to occur though.
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Post by Sp❣rit on Jan 8, 2012 13:58:35 GMT -5
Susumu could only give Haru a confused look when she identified the Caterpie as "a Mewtwo", not "Mewtwo". By saying that, it actually suggested that she thought that she owned the legendary Mewtwo that trainers were on the hunt for. A lot of them wanted one, but to mistake a Caterpie for a Mewtwo? Sounded as if she got ripped off, even if it did come from the lab. Poor girl, he didn't even know how to tell her the truth.
So he didn't; deciding to leave her in blissful ignorance as she was distracted with tickling the cute thing. Shame his own Caterpie wasn't nearly as cute, since he could hardly make the Pokemon talk. None of his Pokemon even knew how to act around it, only making the Shadow Pokemon even harder to battle with. "I didn't see it before, guess it was just hiding." Or he wasn't paying attention because he was digging. He could only shrug at that one, not willing to go much farther with that topic of conversation.
Taking in Resixionne's new coloration, he wasn't sure what to make of it until Haru reacted out of fear and pulled back. It was as if she thought his Torkoal was some kind of demon ready to attack. She was probably right in some regards, but he was somewhat sure that his Torkoal had something called morals. <No one here evolved.> She had no idea that she was recently changed, but she thought Haru was a moron. <I just woke up to the sounds of children being in a place where they aren't supposed to be.> She huffed, glaring right at Haru as if she was purposely trying to intimidate her now.
"No...I think that was a Shiny Orb." The dull stone at Resixionne's feet was proof of that, resembling the item he once saw in magazines. They were supposed to be really rare, and it was a shame it was just used on such a bully of a Pokemon. "The gold color is a nice touch." He smiled weakly at Resixionne, crouching down to look at her up close as her neck retracted in confusion and disgust. She wasn't about to be touched or petted, was she? She refused, hardcore.
<Gold? What are you talking about? I'm a lovely shade of orange, like a flame.> She retorted, staring back at her own trainer as if he was an idiot. She lifted up her left paw as if to show him that he was a moron, but when she caught a glance of it--oh. Wait, it was gold. Was the rest of her gold? At least she had a long neck to check herself out, which she was now doing now that she was distracted. "Don't worry about her, besides. We're almost done here." Susumu could only grin at Haru with reassurance, seeing that the shards in the wall were now visible and just waiting to be dug out.
ooc; Some issues on the past tense here; if you copy and paste your posts on word document really quick, it's pretty good at catching mistakes like this. being force to be amused*forced She was focus on Shamu for a moment*focused began to tickled at *tickle it was a big surprised*surprise "Did i just evolve?!"*it Haru never witness evolution*witnessed I think at the end of the thread, to complete the tutoring you should go over the things that I pointed out. Just fix the typos, try to remember your writing weaknesses so you can work on them in the future. <3 ::doduo:: x ::chatot:: breeding post 8/21 Resixionne Level 25|Female Explosion|Rapid Spin|Smokescreen Fire Spin|Curse|Smog|Ember Ball-buster - Wise - Withdrawn - Enjoys drinking - Sarcastic Oh, guess I am gold.Mining Post 8/10
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Post by Cubbie ♥ on Jan 10, 2012 13:05:17 GMT -5
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why don't you come and visit me | [atrb=style, background-color: #565866;width: 460px; padding: 5px; text-shadow: 1px 1px 1px #91a27d; text-align:center;] Whistle While you Work "Haru, you're the worse trainer ever." | [atrb=style, background-color: F0F0F0; width: 460px; border-right: 6px solid #565866; border-left: 6px solid #565866; padding: 5px;color:#565866] Haru still felt rather shocked about the random change of appearance which was bestowed on the demonic Pokémon. Even though she just heard that it was a shiny orb, she couldn't help think that the Pokémon was planning this in order to do something to her. It wasn't like Haru was the one to easily forget her superstitions, especially ones which had to do with her fears.
She kept a distance away from the Pokémon, just like before but even further. Yet, she didn't want to change the subject yet about just what happened, she still had a few questions about this 'Shiny Orb'. Turning her head towards Shamu, she politely asked "So, what is a shiny orb? I don't really understand what just happened if it wasn't evolution." This was her first time to ever hear about this, 'shiny orb' in her life. She wasn't going to let the chance to hear information about this just go by.
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Haru didn't notice it but her Mewtwo was being squashed between her breasts, being unable to breathe. He was completely mortified due to this experience which was just occurring. From being tickled by forced to being squashed to death, was this really the end of the Caterpie. Only being able to think, he thought out the words which he wanted to say out loud. <"Haru, you're the worse trainer ever.">
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Post by Sp❣rit on Jan 10, 2012 14:19:08 GMT -5
As Susumu was distracted from digging some shards out and talking, he couldn't help but notice Haru's obvious fear of his Torkoal. Resixionne was giving her a rather intense stare, but after a few moments the Pokemon snorted and looked the other way. There was little to gain in scaring a little girl, seeing that it wasn't toughening her up at all. Instead she could only wait as her trainer wrapped up their mining mission for shards, which was coming in in a fairly nice amount.
"You've never heard of them?" He asked, giving her a curious look. "It's advertised in a lot of popular trainer magazines." Adding that to see if it rang a bell, he shrugged. If she didn't know, then she didn't know. "It's a pretty rare item that changes the colors of your Pokemon. I don't think you can change it back." What was he missing from that explanation? Anything? "Usually trainers with shiny Pokemon are kind of rich, or they've been doing it for a while. I guess I got lucky that time." He said a bit modestly, chuckling as he hoped she understood it enough.
The poor Caterpie seemed to be having some trouble, which Susumu picked up on after hearing its troubled squeaks. "Mewtwo looks like he's ready to faint." Chuckling as he said that, he scooped a few more shards out of the mess, noticing that some were broken in the process. Oh well, it happened. He'd probably end up giving some to Haru just for keeping him company after all of this.
x breeding post 19/21 Resixionne Level 25|Female Explosion|Rapid Spin|Smokescreen Fire Spin|Curse|Smog|Ember Ball-buster - Wise - Withdrawn - Enjoys drinking - Sarcastic DerpMining Post 9/10
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Post by Cubbie ♥ on Jan 10, 2012 19:28:12 GMT -5
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why don't you come and visit me | [atrb=style, background-color: #565866;width: 460px; padding: 5px; text-shadow: 1px 1px 1px #91a27d; text-align:center;] Whistle While you Work "" | [atrb=style, background-color: F0F0F0; width: 460px; border-right: 6px solid #565866; border-left: 6px solid #565866; padding: 5px;color:#565866] Pokémon magazines? There were barely any in the area which Haru used to live around. Perhaps she would attempt to give them a read one day, as they seem to contain quite a lot of handy information. She shrugged at the fact that they seemed to be for rich people, after all she did have a shiny pokemon, but she thought it was probably paint or something, she never knew it was caused by a orb. "I guess not, i have a shiny pokemon aswell and I'm not rich." She said with a bit of asoft sounding voice.
She looked down towards her Caterpie, pulling it away from her body as it began to wheeze and take a breath of the air, which was rather a bit dusty due to them being within a mine. She looked towards Mewtwo with a somewhat sad face, as if she had empathy for it. "Mewtwo you poor thing. You missed me that much that your starting to do that? If you wanted a cuddle you could of just hopped at me." Mewtwo was annoyed at Haru's actions, yet he didn't have any will left to fight against her. It would be absolutely futile due to her unawareness. Annoyed as ever, he muttered the words <You're an asshole.>
She let her Pokémon onto the ground, as she went back to 'digging' or picking up rocks in her case. As this was her first time she didn't really have any sort of clue on what to gather. All she was doing was putting away any object that seemed valuable or had some sort of meaning. She stared up towards Shamu for a moment, giving a good stare at his face, reverting her gaze back to the ground afterwards. With a little blush she said "So. Um. How long have you been in Cheyenne? I've only just came here like... about a few weeks ago ."
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Post by Sp❣rit on Jan 10, 2012 23:32:01 GMT -5
Susumu looked at Haru when she shrugged, a bit awkwardly too, as she made that comment. She sounded nervous an uncertain, which made him give her an uneasy smile as he kept working right behind her. "You must've gotten lucky like me then." He grinned, not knowing her story with her shiny Pokemon as he scooped several shards out of the earth. It wasn't a bad assortment, but he mostly dug by himself. He hardly saw Haru do anything, but she seemed kind of scared and nervous. He felt bad, so he decided to share some of what he had with her.
Mewtwo seemed to be doing better, to Susumu's pleasure as he finished gathering up his own shards and letting it rest in his pockets. The hiker man would love to have them, though he didn't know what he was saving up for yet. As Mewtwo and Haru had their moment, Resixionne perked up as her trainer stood up and looked ready to leave. He had his stuff together, from what he could see. Poor Haru just looked as if she needed the company, but he was tired after all of this working by himself. His Pokemon only helped by keeping him warm, and Haru and her Caterpie weren't much help. Poor guy was just trainer.
"Eh? You didn't hear me earlier?" He asked with a semi-frown on his face, figuring that she was too busy fangirling over her own Pokemon. Susumu didn't blame her though; Mewtwo was quite the looker. "You can have the rest of those shards, Haru. I'm done for the day." Eh, even if she was blushing at him and looking cute and awkward, he was tired. His patience was dying down, and he didn't want to snap at her. Instead, he walked away with his new shiny Torkoal, leaving her to collect the shards in peace.
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I guess not, i have a shiny pokemon, well and i'm not rich."
Capitalize words like 'I' and its variations. 'I'm' counts too.
caterpie
Pronouns, like species names, should be capitalized.
You missed me that mcuh that *much
Mewtwo was annoyed a lot, This is worded really awkwardly, I'd try rephrasing this. "Mewtwo was greatly annoyed", "Mewtwo was annoyed enough as it was" or something.
a asshole. I know its dialog, and it's allowed to speak bad English in dialog, but I have a sneaking suspicion that its because you made a typo. *an asshole, use "an" before words with vowels.
as she wet back *went
"So. Um. How long have you been in Cheyenne? I've only just came here like... about a few weeks ago ."
My character already answered this. XD Now it really feels like you didn't read my post at all! It would be fine if you mentioned in your post how Haru wasn't paying any attention, but it just seems more like you missed it entirely.
You're silly, but I digress.
Your last tutoring assignment is to edit all of your posts and fix your mistakes. :'D Then you'll be done!
x breeding post 21/21 Resixionne Level 25|Female Explosion|Rapid Spin|Smokescreen Fire Spin|Curse|Smog|Ember Ball-buster - Wise - Withdrawn - Enjoys drinking - Sarcastic Time to leaveMining Post 10/10
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